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In regards to the cockatrice, I see how that could be problematic as well...I was thinking it could only affect someone if they were either alive, or "weak of mind". Although if anyone else has any other ideas as to how it could be limited that would be greatly appreciated. I will continue to think on it as well.

And DoN-in regards to his strength, he is balanced and not overly powerful in any one area, but tries to use both of his abilities in conjunction so that they are more affective, although this could be considered another one of his weaknesses.

Now about him coming into the rp, I posted his "escape" from Castle Gor'Drak, and currently he is wandering in Sylvania. I am thinking about aligning him with the council, but that's all up to you as well.
 
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Order of the Blood Dragon said:
If he has some sort of control over it, then he decides if he really wants to turn someone to stone.

Yeah, that's definitely applicable regardless of how it affects people, and I was planning on him not necessarily liking to kill people for reasons that will be explained in the rp. I was thinking that it would some how affect him physically, or hinder his ability to cast spells. Or we could simply ensure that I will only utilise the power in specific situations, and I wouldn't go crazy with it xD. Although just as I typed that, I thought it might work if the stone affect only worked when-A) within a certain time period or B) Once a day, week, hour, etc...
 
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Well its upto you how you use it. You just need to bear in mind that other players may decide to crush your cockatrice if it keeps on trying to turn them to stone xd
 
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OK I decided to revise Lovette before I put her in the bio thread. What do you guys think?



Mrs. Lovette

Full Name: Unknown
Associated Names: None
Age: 500 - 600 years (estimated)
Bloodline: Strigoi
Sire: Sweeney Todd

Description
Similar in appearance and physical profile to the average human woman you can find on any street in any major city of the Empire. She is almost always seen with an overdose of eyeshadow. Her dark hair(almost but not quite raven black) falls down to her shoulder level in semi-unruly locks.

She is not strikingly beautiful like Lahmians tend to be, but she makes up for it by being well endowed in the chest area. The effect is enhanced by the frilly bustier dresses she always seems to be wearing.

Her strength is magic rather than close combat like her sire Todd. While she is a master necromancer she is not as powerful as Lesa or V'azrin. She also has a mastery of the Lores of Magic that the Imperial Colleges of Magic teach, having studied there in disguise. Also, unlike the vast majority of her peers, she has a decent grasp of the Wind of Ghyran. She is by no means a master of the Lore of Life though, being handicapped by her vampiric nature.

Having pioneered the use of warpstone in baking pies this inadvertently makes her an alchemist and a master poisoner. She also is a specialist at killing Skaven(especially when using magic), and has developed a branch of necromancy that affects solely Skaven and no other creature.

Equipment

The Rolling Pin of Doom(AKA Skavenbeater/Skavensmiter) - This is her trusty baking tool which she also uses to smite vermin. This impromptu weapon has taken the lives of countless Skaven over the centuries. As a result of the above and its constant exposure to necromantic energies its mere touch is lethal to the ratmen. It constantly exudes the musk of fear and the trapped souls of the vermin it has slain are bound to it, creating a tiny but constant shrilling in the background as the tormented Skaven squeal in eternal damnation. This combines to create an aura that paralyses Skaven with sheer terror and saps their will to fight.

Warpstone meatpies - For some strange reason she always carries a few about her person. There are various different types all with different effects. Some provide regenerative and restorative effects, some are laden with magical power for the person who eats it to use, and others are pure poison to all creatures undead or alive. In essence they are much like wizards' potions though they are different in appearance
(OOC: Basically I didn't want to limit my creativity.)

Cookbook(with notations) - This is actually more of a grimoire than anything else and most of its contents similar to what can be found in a wizard's library. Some of the attached scrolls contain incantations that can be used to dissipate the effects of an enemy wizard's spell.

Lead apron and lead dress - While not literally made of lead her apron and the dresses she usually wear have an uncanny ability to absorb and dampen magic, helping her in her work. The stored energies also help to protect her.

The Black Albatross - This is a unique undead bird-construct that resembles a crow or raven and is powered by a combination of necromancy and clockwork mechanisms. Despite the magicks about it the Albatross is strangely inconspicuous and is in fact indistinguishable from normal birds when viewed from the ground. It is capable of storing and transmitting messages telepathically, as well as relaying what it sees through its dead eyes to its controller. Mrs. Lovette is the only one who knows the full intricacies of the Black Albatross and uses it as her main means of long-range communication between her and Todd.

Brief History
Originally the spinster baker who had moved in below Benjamin Barker's old barber shop, she fell for Sweeney Todd and got sucked into his grand scheme for revenge. Whether the former caused the latter or merely happened simultaneously, none can say. But either way, Todd allowed her to continue helping him and granted her the Blood Kiss.

Whilst Todd departed to the Far East, she reluctantly remained in the Old World to hone her grasp of the arcane arts. They were reunited more than a century later when Todd made the return journey and finally began his vendetta.

Pros
Skavenslayer - Mrs. Lovette has a pathological hatred of all vermin and this extends to Skaven. She is experienced with dealing with(mostly putting down) their kind and has pioneered the development of necromantic spells that work solely on Skaven.

Versatile spellcaster - As the title would suggest she is a powerful wizard and necromancer, though not as powerful as the eldest of the Council her sorcery far exceeds those not as trained or experienced like Mircea. She also has mastered the 8 Lores of Magic and unlike practically all other vampire wizards she can use the Lore of Life decently enough though she is not very good at it.

Dread Chef - She is a master of lacing pies(or other food if need be) with warpstone and has studied its effects on those who consume it. This makes her a master poisoner and warpstone alchemist.

Evasion - Todd has taught her quite a few tricks for avoiding blows, making her more annoyingly difficult to hit than one might expect initially.

Cons
No combat training - Whilst she has the intrinsic strength and speed of all vampires she is no warrior and cannot stand up to the more walike vampires in hand to hand.

Obsessive compulsive - Self explanatory. She has several of these, an overwhelming urge to keep hers and Todd's living and work areas clean being one

Pent-up jealousy - Mrs. Lovette's unrequitted love for Sweeney Todd can make her a very cranky woman. She does not suffer other women getting too friendly with Todd and will not hesitate to use lethal force to express her displeasure. Ironically her constant failure to get Todd to reciprocate her feelings over the centuries means that she shares some of the bottled-up bitter frustration that drives her sire
 
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OK if nothing else it can go in the bio thread then. So unless you're gonna unlock it for me you can do the honors of pasting it in
 
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Oh, by the way DoN, you might want to change Quezalat's post in the Bio thread to the one in this thread (page 13-14), because I revised it due to new information.
 
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Name Jason Nightwere
Title: daemon of the shadow, the Nighwere
Origin: unknown, early empire settlement
Age: 2527
Sire: Neferata

Appearance
Sired as a young prince of 26 he has pricing eyes that are known to glow a ghostly yellow in battle usually clothed in the robes of eternity he has pale skin and black hair. And has long black angelic although menacing wings.

Mentality
A quiet individual he keeps to him self but has a cracked mental state and can be lost in his thoughts. He desires to become great ruler as his father was he was born in the time of stigma but when he heard of a way to immortality he rode out seeking the queen of mysteries. When he arrived at her cathedral it was his quick blade that saved him form the young vampire who answered the door. Thus he was brought before the queen demanding what it was he wanted simply answering “immortality”
Thus striking a bargain with the queen for his kingdom and her immortality and teaching in the ways of magic the queen agreed and found herself with an army of followers. Good on her word she gave him the blood kiss he has never regretted his discussion and has now bargain construction of his own cathedral deep with in the worlds Edge Mountains.

Background
As a prince he was taught at an early age that respect can only be earned but can be faked and that human life was of little concern in the long run. His father Alfred Nighthunt was a brilliant hunter and a wise king to his people and Jason inherited his father’s skill and wisdom yet resented his people. who would in times of war mock him for his actions and would blame him for the people’s death. When word reached his kingdom that the man god had killed the death lord Nagash it sparked his curiosity so he studied where ever he could to discover the history of the undead he learnt much and was an apt pupil of magic.

When his father was slain and he was appointed king he struck out to find the legendary queen of the vampires. Roaming in the high society he found one of the queen’s spies who pointed him towards the silver pinnacle. He entered the cathedral and struck a bargain with the sacrifice of his people for immortality. Thus in one faith full night the armies of the queen stole every one form there beds as they slept. The queen was impressed and the dark deal was done.

He stayed within the silver pinnacle learning all he could and as he learnt his powers and will grew quite extraordinary. He was both potent in magic but lore was his true passion and seeked it with a hunger he achieved balance with both sword skill and magic and on his thousandth year with in the silver pinnacle he was given a special robe a sigh of the undying queens favor known as the cloak of eternity it was a twisted experiment of Nagash himself its trappings contained over 10000 souls threaded together in screaming hate.


It was not soon after this that he had read every thing he could it was time to leave the silver pinnacle. But over the years he had understood that the queen had an innate power over her underlings. Thus using his knowledge of forbidden lore he constructed and amulet to nullify the will of others over his own using ancient Warpstone he created the amulet and escaped accompanied by a retinue of trusted vampires but only Jason escaped the queens grasp.

And so traveled aboard discover the forgotten lore of the world in his time at the silver pinnacle the world around him had changed much where there were once nomadic humans confined to there own kingdoms there now stood the empire the first town he encountered was Waldenhof it was infested with a black plague and as swarmed along the roads they would never venture too close to the strange human his cloak a flutter with the unnatural guise of the long dead.

His thirst for knowledge eventually brought him to the colleges of magic he sensed a familiar presence an aura that of the Neferata when ever he was not immersed in his studies. He however only stayed there for a century for a wizard realized that he had not aged at all since he had got there. Thus fighting his way clear of a heavily armored witch hunter squad but before he was discovered he had found a legend to the where about’s of a blade of khaine hidden deep with in an ancient tomb.

After taking the blade from its ancient home he knew he must find a way of examining it without fear of becoming a blood crazed maniac thus he broke into the dark elf city of Ghroud disguised within the robes of eternity he consulted the hag queen showing her the impressive blade. Upon giving her the blade she threw he off the tower in to the city below when he was saved brought to the underworld striking a deal with Morr himself. The deal was struck Jason would serve the death god in unlife against khaine and his ilk to retrieve the blade. Accepting he was returned to do morrs work venturing back into the hag queens domain as she slept the wail of souls screaming her to sleep.

Stealing back his blade and travelled to the city of Luccini in Tilea who would purge it of the daemons curse of madness bringing it before the priests they removed the curse and gave it to Jason. After leaving the temple of Morr the black guard attacked him seeking to end the accursed vampire’s life. He fought them off each blow giving him new found strength but he was indeed surrounded it was at this point that the luscious black wings formed around him his robes screaming with delight and the power he drove the approaching black guard back and disappeared into the night
The black guards now search for the daemon the call Nightwere.

Equipment
Robes of eternity (night shroud, super natural horror)
Blade of the blood (blood drinker, biting blade)
Amulet of will (wristbands of black gold)
Also (Flying horror, forbidden lore)

really sorry if there are spelling mistakes or grammar problems hope you like him
 
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Nightwere, no offense, but if I were to judge by your post it would seem you have not heard of this grammatical device known to posterity as a 'comma'. You could use a lot more of em, your post merges into one big indigestible chunk otherwise.

That said, it's not a bad start. Now you need to start thinking of what your equipment and abilities will do RP-wise, rather than in tabletop terms.
 
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Not to be difficult but being thrown off a tower isn't going to seriously injure a vampire let alone send it to Morr. Not to mention that Morr doesn't generally do deals with our kind. Not to mention that Neferata really hates men especially at the time you would have her sire Jason.
 
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Simon von Carstein said:
Not to be difficult but being thrown off a tower isn't going to seriously injure a vampire let alone send it to Morr. Not to mention that Morr doesn't generally do deals with our kind. Not to mention that Neferata really hates men especially at the time you would have her sire Jason.

I was under the impression that the city of Ghrond was built for the hag queen, to view the chaos wastes so she doesn't have to go in there and risk getting eaten by demons, thus making the tower so that she could still see into the future. The tower i was referring to was hers so i would presume that it would be very tall, and being thrown off it would kill anyone, even a vampire, after all those building have been known to be spikey in fact dark elves are just down right spikey.

Also the last time a sword of khaine was used it brought about the worship of khaine in the high elves and cursed there king and thus created the dark elves which btw the sacrifice of souls to khaine steals morrs rightful souls with really pisses him off. So i was going for prudent planning to spare a vampire to steal back an evil sword that, who knows what would have done to the dark elves a new war against the high elves?.

I have looked and all i can find is that Neferata surrounds herself with female vampires not that she hates male ones, after all she does want all vampires to be her slaves and march on the ancient ruins of Lahmia? and a fair trade i would presume a kingdom of worshipers for one blood kiss and a new warrior for her army of vampires.

But if you do find a problem with my logic please show me and ill change any problems accordingly.
thank you for your feed back i think i will a just the story a bit, i still want more feed back More! Whahaha......
again sorry about spelling and grammar mistakes I'm trying hard here.
 
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A couple of tips.

Firstly, use commas where you would breathe in a sentence. It's not perfect and there is a lot more to it, bit it is a good starting point. Secondly, as a rule try to have no more than 2 commas in a sentence before using a full stop. It generally makes it flow better.

You might need to read your sentences out loud the first few times you try this, to get an idea where to breathe, but after a while it will start coming automatically.

Also, your bio is incomplete. I need a list of strengths and weaknesses, similar to the other bios. This is so I can compare before approving him.
 
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Mr Nightwere said:
I have looked and all i can find is that Neferata surrounds herself with female vampires not that she hates male ones, after all she does want all vampires to be her slaves and march on the ancient ruins of Lahmia? and a fair trade i would presume a kingdom of worshipers for one blood kiss and a new warrior for her army of vampires.

The 6th edition army book and Night's Dark Masters give Neferta a big dislike of males.

Mr Nightwere said:
Also the last time a sword of khaine was used it brought about the worship of khaine in the high elves and cursed there king and thus created the dark elves which btw the sacrifice of souls to khaine steals morrs rightful souls with really pisses him off. So i was going for prudent planning to spare a vampire to steal back an evil sword that, who knows what would have done to the dark elves a new war against the high elves?.

There is only one Sword of Khaine in existiance, and it is on the Isles of the Dead. There is no more copies in the mortal realm. Not to mention the Sword of Khaine does not steal souls, it just kills people.

Mr Nightwere said:
I was under the impression that the city of Ghrond was built for the hag queen, to view the chaos wastes so she doesn't have to go in there and risk getting eaten by demons, thus making the tower so that she could still see into the future. The tower i was referring to was hers so i would presume that it would be very tall, and being thrown off it would kill anyone, even a vampire, after all those building have been known to be spikey in fact dark elves are just down right spikey.

Jerek was thrown off Drakenhof by Konrad and he survived just fine.


Also, why did your vampire get black wings? As far as I know Lahiman vampires don't spontanously spout black feathered wings for no reason.

Not to mention we still need a list of strengths and weaknesses.
 
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thank you very much Gree, i can use that feed back, i will have to seriously change some stuff. I just really liked the black wings idea, haaaaa..... o well ill have to twink it, if you know a way to give him black wings please tell me, gosh darn it, i love angle wings they have a creepy beauty about them i just adore.

Didn't know about the blade of khaine thing through, thanks 4 that i was talking about his cult, and the sacrificing souls to khaine, thus going to him instead of Morr, that's what i was referring to, not the blade itself. i wanted something that said steals blood so the murder god (blood god ?) seemed like an obvious choice.

Wouldn't the tower of Ghrond be taller than Darkenhof? but fair enough ill make it a little more deadly to a vampire.Then again he probably wouldn't be there, because there is not a blade of Khaine... Or maybe he thought there was, was stabbed him in the heart and then fire balled off the tower? but then morr wouldn't save him... unless it was morrs blade?..... but Morrs not big on blades i don't think. you have given me a lot to think about thank you.

ill get onto those strengths and weaknesses DoN. my character is probably gonna change a lot., but ill figure it out.

sorry to Simon Von Carstien, i feel like i attacked his criticism... sorry
ok now how this for grammar?
curse you grammar!.
 
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Revised Edition
Still needs work, forgive grammar please.

Name: Jason Nightwere
Title: daemon of the shadow, the Nighwere
Origin: unknown, early empire settlement
Age: 2527
Sire: Sara Valarious

Appearance
Sired as a young prince of 28 Jason has piercing eyes that are a feral yellow color, usually clothed in the robes of eternity, has pale skin and long black hair that is usually messy. In adition to this, Jason also features long black wings formed from the cloak of eternity.

Equipment

Robes of eternity
Blade of the blood

Mentality
A quiet individual Jason keeps to himself but has a cracked mental state and can be lost in his thoughts. When he heard of a way to immortality, he rode out seeking the Queen of Mysteries. During his time imprisoned there his anger grew and grew. He mistrusts anyone too friendly or new, and saves his trust for these who truly deserve his respect.

Background
As a young prince, Jason was taught at an early age that respect can only be earned, but can be faked, and that human life was of little concern in the long run. His father Nathanial Nighthunt was a brilliant hunter, and wise king and Jason inherited his father’s skill and wisdom, yet resented his people. He would curse his father in times of war and would mock him for his decisions blaming him for the people’s deaths. When word reached his kingdom that the man god had slain the death lord, Nagash, it sparked Jason’s curiosity, so he studied where ever he could to discover more of the history of the undead. He learnt much and became an apt pupil of magic.

When his father was slain in combat for his people, Jason was appointed king however instead of embracing his people, he rode out to find the legendary Queen of the vampires. He started roaming in the high society finding one of the Queen’s spies Sara Valarious; she pointed him towards the silver pinnacle, but warned of the queen’s hatred and evil. He entered the cathedral and struck a bargain with the sacrifice of his people for his immortality. Thus in one faith full night the armies of the queen stole every one form there beds as they slept. The queen wasn’t impressed, and threw him into her darkest dungeons.

He stayed within the silver pinnacle for many years, tortured and given less and less food. In the end it was Sara who attempted to free him, But soon the queen sent her thralls to capture Jason, he was brought before her although he could not see her for she was behind many silk curtains, she commanded that Sara give him the blood kiss, so he may spend an eternity of torture imprisoned within the silver pinnacle.

At last it was done his immortality assured, for over 250 years he was the dreaded queen’s prisoner his eyes grew a feral yellow color and his hair grew long, scars of enchanted torture devices riddled his body. Until it was one day 270 years since he had arrived that an attack form below was felt Shaven flowed past and set free the toured soul of Jason Nighthunt as he was released possibly to be eaten no one can say for sure, perhaps pity or a feral resemblance. But all the same He his eyes grew light and he attacked with a appetite for the blood of his victims he slaughtered hundreds and hundreds of the creatures in a fit of blood and joy.

He then entered the chamber of the dreaded queen and bowed before her “I wish an audience” he said slowly blood soaked his scared flesh and rose to greet the queen my queen I have slain the Skaven horde, I wish freedom and service. The queen replied and you shall receive neither a smirk upon her cold face. Again he was locked with in the dungeon this time with a message on the ground underneath was a black robe. The message read

Jason for your service, I give you this the robe of eternity the queen my not see it for she is blind to the strengths of men but you have power with in you and you must carve out your own destiny use this robe to escape this dreaded place and never return it is more powerful than it seams, And so are you I’m truly sorry Jason.

Yours sincerely Sara valarious


He put on the cloak and slipped away into the darkness of the cold night, over 300 years he had been a prisoner, at long last he was free. He continued to wear the robe of eternity, travelling aboard to discover the forgotten lore of the world. In his time at the silver pinnacle the world around him had changed much, but there were still many secrets to be found and it was his will to find that fuled him over the coming centuries. he tangled with many others of his kind most notably was Lesa, a vampire of great and exotic beauty how also quested for knowledge and artefacts, but when he was in her presence his scars would burn and sting his flesh there was something more about this vampire, that he did not fully understand.

Eventually his thirst for knowledge brought him to the colleges of magic, staying there for many centuries. He started experimenting on his cloak and enhanced its powers, he sowed the souls of the dammed into its thread until the cloak would scream in anger and pain, when ever Jason would command he also made it as black as night and unable to see him in darkness, adding Warpstone to the vile design he feared what effect this would have on him. It had become a massively useful device in his travels and was more apart of him each day. His power over the centuries had indeed grown and was revered as a powerful alchemist, and wizard. And he continued to study the lore and magic’s of the college.

It was his vampiric nature that He was eventually discovered, missing people and a wizard realizing that he had not aged at all since he had got there. So fighting his way clear of a heavily armored witch hunter group, he escaped. He had discovered a legendary blade where about’s. Hidden deep with in an ancient tomb submersed after centuries of neglect, and Worshiped by a race of ghouls that had worshiped the blade as a gift from the gods (vampires), the origin of the blade was unknown for it was only a reference to the ghouls but Jason knew well enough the location indicated in the text.

After taking the blade from its ancient home, he knew there must find a way of examining it without fear of any unholy enchantments bestowed upon it. And so he traveled to the city of Luccini in Tilea, knowing that the priests of morr could remove any side effects form the vampiric blade that could purge it of the curse bringing it before the priests they removed a curse of blood drain from it that would have almost have killed him, and gave it back to Jason.

After leaving the temple of Morr the black guard attacked him, seeking to end the accursed vampire’s unlife. He fought them off each blow giving him new found strength. But He was indeed surrounded, it was at this point that the luscious black wings formed from his robes, screaming with delight at the new founds powers the souls had been mutated by the Warp stone leaving Jason unscaled and unmutated. With wings at his back he drove the approaching black guard back, and disappeared into the night’s sky. The black guards now search for the daemon of the night, they call Nightwere.

After escaping Luccini in the 1800’s, he traveled to Sylvania where he met Vlad Von Carstein. Only a new ruler, Jason agreed to work for him as both a spy and assassin for he was reminded of his father as both a fair and wise leader. It is believed that he was behind many of the ruling noble’s grievous accidents and unfortunate circumstances, over the coming years. And in 2000 he was instructed to gather the meteorite Warp stone from the Mordheim ruins.

He was indeed a loyal servant of Vlad, but his job was not with out its dangers even to a vampire, one such time was a chaos raid from the world Edge Mountains. while he was out collecting alchemical ingredients within a low lying cave demons stuck and with a lightning series of swings were slain by Jason.

He did however enjoy the company of the other vampires; Mannfred von Carstien was one such individual and taught Mannfred some of the magical secrets he had gathered over his travels. He was an apt pupil and Jason saw that he had great power with in him. Unlike Mannfred Jason held a great dislike for Konnard von Carstien, and viewed the brute as a foolish drone of Vlad not much good for more that a berserk.

When Vlad began his war against the world of men, Jason warned him of Mannfreds treatuary over the years he have grown fond of Mannfred but never got on his bad side and knew of his scheming, Vlad paid no heed to Jason and continued and after his defeat he went searching for the illusive thief but to no avail.

Rather than return to the accursed Sylvain, and serve Konard, he ventured into the world once more searching for lore, knowledge and treasure. He one day hopes to save his sire and repay the favor for his release; she may be the only one that Jason truly feels for in the world. He has heard of the vampire council however and there accomplishments and agrees that the spoils would be great if an alliance was formed.


Pros
Powerful at magic over physical strength it is his equipment that allows him the most benefit in combat the robes of eternity are now as much apart of him as his scars allowing him abilities of flight and stealth he is a powerful alchemist and can enchant powerful items of war he has a strong will and when others try to control him it manifests as a burning of his enchanted scars sustained in the silver pinnacle.

Cons
Lacking in combat skill his mental state is cracked and makes it hard for him to trust others will always be sceptical and never open up fully to others and may hide information for his own personal gain unless he complexly respects the other person with they must earn to earn his trust.

Hope you like it, i Still need more more i tell ya (feed back that is it helps me greatly).
 
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I wasn't aware there were a lot? isn't big on magic through, but yes defiantly leans towards it. An alchemist or assassin magic user in my opinion but its up to you. xD
 
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Your comment wasn't overly helpful Vekarin - constructive criticism works much better.

Ok, firstly a superb improvement the grammar. I won't like, it's not perfect but then again neither is mine. The fact you are trying much appreciated. The only other I would suggest, is writing big posts like this in Microsoft Word first, It will pick up little annoying things, like missed capital letters or full stops. But as I said, a big improvement.

Secondly - Great fluff. You have taken our comments, listened to them, and then amended accordingly. Your fluff now works pretty well, shows Neferata's hate etc. I also like the reference of Lesa in there xd, no doubt if your vampire had been hunting for artifacts, they would have come across each other.

In regards to what Vekarin said. Yes we do have powerful casters, but then I think we have someone powerful in every area, so that could have been said whatever you chose.

You can have your vampire magically powerful, however you will have to understand that the already established magically powerful vampires will be stronger. From what I can see and read I would assume the following:

Pros:
Magically Adept (I would suggest he is limited to only Necromancy, or the darkers lores such as Death Shadows)
Powerful Magical Items - Sword can breach any known armour. Cloak allows for flight, and also enhances stealth.
Speed. Can fly faster than other vampires (no one else has this record yet)
Alchemist - Knows elements, chemicals etc

Cons
Not overly skilled in combat compared to the other lords who are better trained. Relies more on surprise.
No strong defence - relies on dodging attacks or projectiles
Broken mind - as mentioned above.


I think that will give you a better balanced character, however I would change the part of your fluff where he beat a Bloodthirster in one on one combat. I would assume only the very best in combat (such as the aforementioned Vekarin), would be able to do such a feat.

Hope that helps.
 
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Ok, its gone. I had firstly imagined him as good in combat, althrough lacking in defense but i sorta switched them around making his cloak nice and powerful, thus able to defeat enemies fairly quickly, with out giving them a chance to do much damage, taking advantage of the Lahmian speed. So he may give skilled swords men a run but unlikely. Vekain who i will assume is a very skilled swordsman, would be and example of someone he couldn't out maneuver, as i cant imagine him liking magic, and only being combat based.

Ill up it in table top terms, just to help me and maybe you?

Think Nightshroud with flight, terror and Wristbands of black gold
blood drinker and forbidden lore so all vampire magics (lvl 3 wizard).
not useless either way, although leans towards magic definitely

Sorry the fluff is a bit err, lengthy. i just sorta added and didn't take anything out, and i will be trying more with the grammar, surprisingly you have probably helped me more with it than my English teacher. Who by the way never really gave me much help in the matter, and just marked me low. :(
CURSES :devil:

and i did do it in word i wanted a copy that i could tweak alot xD
 
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Exactly how cracked is his mental state? Mere paranoia? Or true insanity? Anywhere inbetween?

And just questioning the shroud, it makes him unnoticed, therefore if you focus closely you see him, but invisible if you are casual? Does it make him blend into the shadows, so for example would it work in a brightly lit room? Does it make him truely invisible?
 
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