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Name: Malakhar
Age: 412
Sire: Zacharias
Bio:
For as long as anyone could remember, the village of Waltenhof had lain in the shadow of Waltraud Keep, a once grand estate which had fallen to ruin after the gruesome murder of all 26 inhabitants. It was said that one night centuries ago, as a storm shook the trees and tore the roofs from the thatched houses, an old stranger clad in grubby, tattered clothing and leaning on a gnarled, cracked staff begged the Waltrauds for shelter from the harsh elements. The arrogant, wealthy family saw such peasants as a blight to the soil on which they walked, and turned the stranger away with crossbow bolts and scornful laughter. The stranger was hit once as he fled, and, before disappearing into the wind and rain, swore damnation on the Waltraud family and all their descendants.

One Geheimesnacht, ten years before the current day, a massive cloud of bats was seen fluttering towards the ruins of the keep. The superstitious townspeople saw this as a twisted fulfillment of the old traveler's curse. In truth, it was the arrival of the Necrach Vampire, Malakhar. For the next ten years, whenever Mannslieb waned and the grinning face of the Witch Moon showed full, the keep would fairly radiate dark magical energy, and the following morning, the townsfolk would discover that one or two of them had vanished in the night, drawn by whatever cursed power had been unleashed.

Within the keep, Malakhar was summoning massive amounts of necromantic energy, sending his skeletal minions to pilfer those in their prime from the village, so that he could suck the life from them to fuel himself and the dark rituals which he was performing. On Geheimisnacht, one decade after his arrival, he deemed that he had gathered enough dark power to implement his plot. With words never intended to be spoken, he dove his soul into the Grey Vaults, the land of spirits between our world and the Kingdom of Morr where the unquiet souls of those with unfinished business still wait. Spitting unholy words of summoning and binding, the Nechrach tore the spirits of the dozens of men, women and children of the Waltraud family from their ghostly home and bound them into himself, enslaving them forever in torment, their life force augmenting Malakhar's already massive sorcerous power.

With his ancient curse fulfilled, the Vampire slaughtered the unfortunate townsfolk of Waltenhof, and reanimated them as the first of a legion of undead minions.

Skills:
Master of Wizardry: Malakhar studied under the great Zacharias for a time, before seeking out others skilled in the ways of sorcery, learning under powerful chaos sorcerors, human wizard lords, and even studying the books of the Lichemaster, Kemmler this intensive study has given him an insight and skill with sorcery equal to those far older than he. .
Soul Splice: Through hundreds of years of experimenting and studying, Malakhar has composed a spell to bind the souls of others to his will. Whenever he vanquishes a particularly worthy foe, he adds their essence to his own, gaining a portion of their skills and knowledge. He has put this to good use to counteract the traditional weakness of the Necrach, and enhanced his skill with a blade so that he may nearly match, if not surpass, the martial skills of his fellow Vampires.

Weaknesses:
Rebellious Spirits: The binding of souls is not a perfect science. While still being overall bound to his will, the particularly strong spirits can fight Malakhar's own dominance, filling his mind with a howling, screeching cacophony that distracts his spellcasting. In times of particular shock, perhaps when he is wounded or emotionally turbulent, these spirits can even temporarily seize control of Malakhar's body, and doing their best to ensure his destruction.
 
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Lucien the immortal said:
the sire was born 2000 years ago not lucien. She is now had to wait till like 1800 years to muster a big enough army (look at Luciens age) Lucien was born near modern brettonia.

But you had his sire chased away 2000 years ago when there was no unified Brettonia. Besides, if he has born a Duke he would have haerd about him in the fluff, GW has the names of the Dukes pretty well locked down. Making him a Count or powerful Baron would be better.
 
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siring someone is a big deal for vampires its never just yoused for gettign back at some one she could simply turn him in to a zombie or waith, siring another vampire can drain her powers a bit and vampires never like sharing there power with others.

Also if he is as blood thirsty as you say, he would have become deformed. Drinking the blood form rotting corpses is a big no no and only the most savage and desperite vampire endulge in it (stergori).

How will he enter the story if he hates other vampires, what blood line can effect what type of vampire you will become i would sugest having your sire a stegori simply because of how you wrote your story just a sugestion it is your caracter so you should decide.

Hope this feed back helps read the rule book of the vampire counts it helps alot.
 
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he doesnt hate lahmian vampires he just doesnt trust them asmuch of a normal vampire. As in his bloodline i dont know much about that cus i aint got rulebook yet. She didnt want to kill him but he was starting to get very bloodthirsty and protective over the blood so she decided to kill him.
I dont know much abot the Stegori, he could be misformed but he doesnt have a bloodline even though his sire was a lahmian vampire she had other plans for him.
 
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But why would she btoher to sire a male when she could just easily seduce and mesmirse him into doing her bidding, as the Lahmians strandard MO.
 
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Lucien, bio looks interesting, but perhaps needs to go a bit more indepth. Firstly can you lay out your bio as per this thread:

https://www.vampirecounts.net/showthread.php?tid=2691

I would also strongly suggest you take Gree's and Nightwere's suggestions into consideration, especially Gree's note on the timeline. Once you have resubmitted in the correct format then I can confirm either way.

The Spanish Inquisition (or ISI as I shall now refer to you), your bio looks excellent. Well thought and indepth. The one thing I would note is that normally we would not allow someone to be extremely powerful in both combat and magic, apart from certain characters. In your case you can be quite magically powerful if you like, but you will still not match the level of Lesa / V'azrin / The Sentence etc. In regards to combat, you can be on par with an average Carstein. This means you will beat Lahmians and weaker vampires, but not Strigoi / Blood Dragon vampires, nor the more combat orientated vampires such as Simon or Gree.

If your ok with that your fine to go into the OOC thread and discuss how to best incorporate your character into the current chapters.
 
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Re-reading it, I seem to have exaggerated how skilled Malakhar is in combat. The intention is that he is skilled enough to hold his own against a skilled human (Say, Ludwig Swartzhelm), and survive long enough to escape the likes of Drakki or Vekarian Banespike.
 
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disciple im re-writing it now. I have changed it alot.
Full Name: Lucien
Associated names: The blood hunter.
Associated Names after transformation: Blood Hulk.

Age: 48 days 28 years old before vampirism

Appearance before transformation: Grey skin with long black hair. Veins that are wide and long over his cheeks and neck. He had unusually long fangs even for a vampire. Hair to his shoulders.

Appearance after transformation: at least 9-foot tall. Blood red skin. Fangs about 6 inches long. Hair turns into a long streak of black fur down his back. Eyes glowing red.

Powers: Very strong but slow. Rubbish at magic, Stronger then almost all vampires. Ghouls are attracted to Lucien usually he will have 5 ghouls with him and more in his cave if they die more will eventually come to him.

Con: He is Never on the defensive. No magic. Has a thirst like no over vampire, he is always thirsty and will go out of his way for blood even drink dead peoples blood. Also at the taste of blood or when he gets angry he turns into blood hulk. He is slow for a vampire but he is still faster then a human. Has no skill. Easy target: most blows will hit him since he is so large as the blood hulk nearly all will hit him
Blood hulk: incredibly slow, slower then a human, but each blow Is very, very strong.

Before transformation, Equipment: bare chest. Cloth trousers. Axe – incredibly big one sweep of this can cut most armour in half.

After transformation, equipment: bare chest. Ripped cloth trousers. Drops axe. Claws and fangs.
Background story: His Sire was a Strigoi vampire. He lived in a cave and often came down to feed on the dead. It mutated him; it gave him an inner beast that he could not control. When he thought he had best control over it he decided he wanted a apprentice who he could teach control to and how to live as a strigoi. The more he thought of it the more it appealed to him. He searched through brettonia For someone with enough power and self control to be able to take this. That is when he found Count Lucien. He captured Lucien and took him to his cave and used the blood kiss on him. Lucien was out three days before he awoke with this power. He learnt of his sire. First he learnt how to make ghouls come to him, then his sire went on to blood control, Halfway through this down at a graveyard. His sire was teaching Lucien how to control the blood but a witch hunter came. It shot a bolt right through his sires’ heart. Lucien went mad, straight away he turned into blood hulk and all that was left of the hunter was his blood. Which blood Hulk drank, he then continued into the village, a poor peasant town. He killed everyone there and got back to the cave without anyone noticing. Here got the ghouls ready and started his journey, working for any who would hire him. He was later known as the blood hunter for his lust of blood.



There we go better?
 
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Yes though I have no doubt Ghouly will have something to comment as his character Graveclaw is also a very strong bestial Strigoi.

Anyway, considering the many cons he has, I would be quite happy for him to be second to Graveclaw in pure strength alone when he is transformed into the Blood Hulk. Note however, pure strength does not equal combat skill........

As with ISI, you can discuss his intro in the OOC thread.
 
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i would recycle an old name but it sounds to same as graveclaw then. My old one is KillKlaw or Blood Claw
outta them 2 blood claw is better cus of blood lust
 
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If he is just 50 days old then why is he stornger than most vampires? Even if he wehre a strigoi a centuires old master should be able ot overpower someone who is just 50 days as a vampire. Let alone millenia old vampires.
 
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50 Days old, and that strong? Give a reason, some thing that happened during his human life for example.

And reinforcing DoN's point that strength does not equal combat prowess, there are many opponents who he will simply not be able to harm. If he is slower than a human even, I would be able to harm him, providing he doesn't send me flying.
 
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Arion said:
If he is slower than a human even, I would be able to harm him, if I was energized enough, simply dodgeing each overbalanced strike and lunging, then retreating (Note, I'm a very good fencer.) Thats providing a sword would do anything...

....am I'm a Special forces Commando, I've killed 70 men with my bare hands and have singlehandedly overthrown 3 South American dictatorships. I have a katana and I can deflect bullets with it.xD

I'm sorry man, I just could't resist.xD
 
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Nice one Gree

Lucien you need to take in account that aging works in reverse for vampires, the older a vampire is the stronger/more skilled/better at magic/better at whatever s/he'll get. It will be quite strange that your vampire is much stronger than those which are tens of thousand times older than yours(literally since yours is only about 2 months old), but it's fine as long as you have huge weaknesses to go along with it. You might need to make your character a bit more unqiue since you're very close to intruding on Graveclaw's established niche. Regarding your character's motivation, there seems to be a gap in between his sire being killed and him leaving for the road. One would not lead to the other, especially since a bestial Strigoi is not likely to run about looking for work and he isn't likely to get hired anyway. You might need to reword or change your character's motivation for taking part in TVC.

As for TSI, you should go back and fix your wording. Other than that state what equipment your dude has and it's good to go. I'm fine with your character suddenly appearing in any of the active chapters, after all No One Expects The Spanish Inquisition! xD
 
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are humans involved in the Vampire council, i meen like good necromancers are they involved? Because if so i have a good idea then for a character, well i think so anyway. I will try and do some more stuff on Lucien aswell.
 
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I believe that Dark Lord Nihilus' character (one of them, at least) is a human, although he is possessed by a daemon or two. I think that an ambitious and clever human could fit in rather well. :)
 
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im still thinking up ideas but im kinda thinking mix an empire generel with a necromancer. Like a technology wizard, he uses guns and stuff instead of magic. But in the process he uses warp-stone to make it more powerful, the warpstone has mutated him so much he doesn't think like a human atall now? Should i go on with this?
 
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That actually sounds pretty interesting. Again the best idea is to draw up a bio. In regards to the Lucien character I would again take the other comments into consideration. I have approved it because it is a playable character, however you may find fitting into an existing cliche, that to be frank is filled by the better character Graveclaw, you may find the experience unfulfilling.
 
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Perhaps not Ghouly, but I always try to be honest in my advice, and with Lucien's current fluff it is what I think. However I haven't left him in the lurch. He has PM'd me and the new idea he has sounds excellent.
 
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just read graveclaws bio and to be honest mine sounds like its trying to rip it of, but making abad job. I dont mind if urs is better aslong as i get the truth. I have sent new ideas for proof read and if they are allright i will post it for everyone to see so dont worry.
Some of thous ideas.
Full name: Lucien the Mad

Appearence: Long grey hair to shoulders. Glowing green eyes from the warpstone he tested on them. Far out, errm whats the word, Protruding? cheek bones? Very pale. Considers himself half vampire.

Age: doesnt know. He lost count when he was slave for the Skaven. The warpstone has made him age alot slower then normal humans. Atleast over 100 years.

Weapons, clothes and equipment: Tanned red leather trousers with a ruined cloth top. He has a sheath to a long fin sword with runes on, named after one of the two moons, Mannslieb which was powered by Warpstone making it poisonous and magic. He has pouches around his belt full of warpstone. Also has two warpstone pistols, one of which is a repeater warpstone pistol that he calls Deimos, meening Terror in Greek. This one is faster and stronger then his other pistol. It also uses his special warpstone that he calls blood stone because it is red and provides stronger Bullets then normal warpstone. Along his back was an extremely big and heavy modifed warp handgun. (like an early days sniper rifle :thumb but this takes along time to set up. This was known to even blow limbs of Vampires.

HomeTown: A small village now not existing thanks to Skaven raids.

i haven't come up with much of a story but i was thinking:

Background: Lucien's father was an engineer in the empire, he taught Lucien how to make Pistols and use various ammo. Lucien was good at this because he was very clever, even though he had weird ways to show this. His father was proud, Lucien even helped his father create a new modified handgun, which was extremely strong. One day in the village a Skaven raid came. Skaven were known to pick on small villages, it was why they picked this one. The small horde swarmed the poor villagers and killed them with ease, only taking few prisoners one of which was Lucien, his father was killed. Lucien was hold as a slave and even fought against other clans with this clan, he had no choice. When one day the choice came for him to get out of there, ofcourse he took it and ran. On his way running he strangled a Skaven slavemaster to death and took its whip. He ran after that. As he got out into the open air he ran to where his village once was it hadn't been moved because it was in middle of mountains where noone goes. He cried over his father. He weeped for days before hunger settled in. This wasn't normal hunger, it was hunger for revenge. He got his dads two pistols and his modified handgun and went back to the Skaven. When there he hunted down the Skaven Warlock engineer that killed and slaughtered lots of people. He killed the Warlock and found his pouches, full of warpstone. He realised what he could do with this form of energy. He went deeper into the Skaven lair searching for more Warpstone. As Deimos was running he found it, the bane of all power. He called it Blood-Stone, With this he ran before the Skaven could regroup and kill him. Once outside in the open air, his tests beginned.

Skills:
Warp-Eye: He has charged his eye with magic energy, this enables him to spot enemies and aim easier with his gun. This skill grants better aim and longer vision.

Deimos: A Rapid shooting bloodstone pistol, very strong and fast at shooting.

Warplock pistol: a weekened and slower version of Deimos can kill Humans with ease but it is only a distraction against vampires, by slowing them down mainly for Deimos to shoot.

Warpstone modified handgun: Very strong gun but takes a long time to set up on the floor, also has very long range.

Last resort: As soon as a vampire gets up close to him he is as close as dead. The only thing which could save him then would be Deimos or his fast running, He almost runs as fast as a Vampire! But when he runs he often shoots his normal Warp pistol to slow them down.

Warp guns: Warp guns dont require ammo as they shoot raw energy.


CONS: he is very weak and he is as tough as a human. He isn't as fast as a vampire but faster then a human. Mad.

Pros: Fast for a human. Great aim. Warp guns. Very clever.
 
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