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[Get of W'soran]

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As part of the Tomb King forces that will come into play later;

Menhutep the Blessed
Full Name: Menhutep III
Associated Names: Menhutep the Blessed, King of Mehkat, Ruler of the Sun, Enlightened of the Gods, Master of the Secret words, Servant of the Great One.
Age: 4000+
Place of Birth: Mehkat

Description
Menhutep is what the people of the empire refer to as a Tomb King, in life he had been a man of average height and lithe built, he had been of average looks. However now he stands as a mummified husk of what he once was, dressed in the armour of ancient Nehekhara he still has an authoritative presence, even if twisted in a grotesque fashion.
In life he had been Priest King of Mehkat, which was a small city which had been a Vassal City of Mahrak.
In death he is Tomb King of Mehkat, a vassal city of Khemri.

Equipment
The Sword of Ptra-A large Khopesh blessed by the Sun God, the blade cuts through armour and flesh with Equal ease burning flesh as it does so, it was gifted to Menhutep by Mahrak.
Shield of Ptra-Unleashes blinding flashes of light.
Armour of Mehkat- A shining Golden suit of the armour of Kings which has never became tarnished or dented throughout the ages, it is said that the armour was created by the Great Father himself for the first king of Mehkat; it was gifted to Menhutep’s Grandfather by the city of Mahrak.
Crown of Light-The golden crown represents Menhutep’s kingship of Mehkat, the front of the ornate crown has a Golden Serpent engraved around the outside of it.
Spear of Mehkat-A well made Spear which is used by the King when on his Chariot.


Brief History
Menhutep III grew up in Mehkat; he was the second son of King Ranthept. When he was only twenty two he was crowned as king due to his father’s death in the war against the Great Blasphemer, once crowned he found the truth of his city, it was in a poor way due to the rise of Nagash. Since Mehkat had survived being a servant of Mahrak for many years it had become severely weakened Mahrak had to withdraw most of its support for the smaller city due to the war with Nagash.
The minor city was well known for its Priesthood and during Menhutep’s reign he decided to strengthen this belief by investing in the cities Priesthood and by trying to re-strengthen its ties to the great city of Mahrak. To this end he mastered the Incantations of the Liche Priests for himself in many ways to show his support. During life he was exceeding strong of body despite his light build and was said to be blessed of Ptra.
Surviving the war with Nagash he died of natural causes still strong and able.

Since rising from the dead due to Nagash’s great spell he has ensured his dominance over the city of Mehkat and now commands a considerable army, all others who believed they had the right of king to the city now lie truly dead or serve as officers for Menhutep.
After seeing Settra’s advance he, at first, attempted to hold back the Lord requesting assistance from Mahrak, but none was fore coming. In bitter anger he bowed to Settra and now helps the Great Kings battle against King Phar.

Pro's
Skilled Swordsman-As a King Priest who led armies against Nagash’s forces in life and death he had became quite skilful.
Scholar-In life he delved greatly into the divine texts and has mastered the incantations of the priesthood to great effect.
Blessed of Ptra-Blessed by the Great Father he has, on occasions of great need, summoned searing light in the palm of his hand and is defended well, he is also faster than many Tomb Kings.
Curse-Any who strike him down will be in turn struck by an ancient and fatal curse.
Undead-He needs never rest nor eat.
Horrifying-His appearance strikes fear into the living.
King-Has a great Warhost at his time including other Tomb Kings, Princes and Liche Priests.

Con's
Flammable-Like all Tomb Kings he has a weakness to fire although at times Ptra will protect him from this.
Gifted of the Gods- As a blessed on of Ptra he is divinely gifted with speed greater than his Tomb King Brethren.
Duellist-Due to his fighting style he employs less strength than most other Tomb Kings.
Worried-Due to his new loyalties to King Settra he now fears Phar’s retribution.
Subservient-Despite his status as “king” he must bow to Settra’s will.
Sibling love-If anything happens to his brother he will become enraged and lose his ability to think logically.





Liche High Priest Amenakht
Full Name: Amenakht
Associated Names: High Priest of Mehkat, Keeper of Secrets, Lord of the Divine Word, Prophet of the Awakened One, Bearer of the Serpent Staff, Amenakht the Everlasting
Age: 4000+
Place of Birth: Mehkat

Description
As a Liche Priest he looks nothing like he did in life, his appearance is similar to his brother, perhaps slightly shorter.
He carries a staff at all times along with other artefacts, he was known as the greatest priest of Mehkat throughout all the ages.
Still alive when Nagash cast his great spell that ended all life in the land he was the Liche that awoke his younger brother’s forces.

Equipment
Serpent Staff of Mehkat-It empowers the wielder by drawing on the winds of magic; it also has the ability to unleash a horde of flesh-eating locus. Also any physical attack with the staff will cause the poisoning. Gifted to Amenakht by the City of Mahrak
Golden Ankhra-The Ankhra surrounds the wielder with Protective energies.
Brooch of the Great Desert-Can be used to dispel a single spell, must be reenergised by the Liche after its use.

Brief History
Amenakht grew up in Mehkat; he was the first born son of King Ranthept and as tradition dictated he was given to the priesthood. At first he was a slow learner and due to lazy inclination did little work, however at the age of twenty six his brother became king and realising that his brother needed a lot of help with his reign he decided that he had to help his sibling.
Once he put the effort in Amenakht began to rise through the ranks of the Mortuary Cult with astonishing speed and by the time he was thirty-three he had reached a senior rank in the Cult and then with his Brothers help he was granted the position of High Priest of the city. Most believe that if not for his brother’s influence he most likely would have had to wait at least two more decades for the chance at this position.
Once at this rank he delved heavily into the incantations of the order and became a powerful Priest and despite the insignificance of his city he was one of the greatest of his order.
He continued life, or at least a Liche’s version of it, until Nagash turned his land into one of the dead.
He also was the one who awoke his brother and his army.
He has since served as the main Hierophant of his brother, and kings, forces.

Pro's
Greatest of Mehkat-The greatest priest that the city has ever produced; he is amongst the most powerful and gifted of the Liche Priests of Nehekhara.
Scholar-Due to his academic nature and his access to the Mortuary cult’s texts he holds a great deal of knowledge both common and secret.
Staff User-He has some skill with fighting with a staff against average opponents.
High Priest-He has a number of lesser priests at his command.
Undead-He needs never rest nor eat

Con's
Wasted Strength-Amenakht is potentially a powerful wizard but due to his lack of knowledge of anything outside the incantations of his priesthood he is not as versatile as most magi.
Sibling love-If anything happens to his brother he will become enraged and lose his ability to think logically.
Fragile-In comparison to a vampire he is quite weak.

 

[Simon von Carstein]

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I believe Nehekharan tradition holds that the first born goes to the priesthood and the second born inherits the throne.

 

[Get of W'soran]

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I had thought that too from the Nagash book, i could of swore reading somewhere that the first born was given to the priesthood to show their faith to the gods but I got references from the internet that said otherwise

Anyway thanks Simon will make the changes now.

 

[Azahul]

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Oooh, an ex-skaven slave. I sense fun times

 

[Arion]

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just read graveclaws bio and to be honest mine sounds like its trying to rip it of, but making abad job. I dont mind if urs is better aslong as i get the truth. I have sent new ideas for proof read and if they are allright i will post it for everyone to see so dont worry.
Some of thous ideas.

GRAMMAR AND SPELLING!
Full name: Lucien the Mad

Appearence: Long grey hair to shoulders. Glowing green eyes from the warpstone he tested on them. Far out, errm whats the word, Protruding? cheek bones? Very pale. Considers himself half vampire.

Why? He doesn't have any characteristics of one except pale skin and reduced ageing, if thats your reason every single darkelf could consider themselves half vampire. Honestly.

Age: doesnt know. He lost count when he was slave for the Skaven. The warpstone has made him age alot slower then normal humans. Atleast over 100 years.

... works

Weapons, clothes and equipment: Tanned red leather trousers with a ruined cloth top. He has a sheath to a long fin sword with runes on, named after one of the two moons, Mannslieb which was powered by Warpstone making it poisonous and magic. He has pouches around his belt full of warpstone. Also has two warpstone pistols, one of which is a repeater warpstone pistol that he calls Deimos, meening Terror in Greek. This one is faster and stronger then his other pistol. It also uses his special warpstone that he calls blood stone because it is red and provides stronger Bullets then normal warpstone. Along his back was an extremely big and heavy modifed warp handgun. (like an early days sniper rifle :thumb but this takes along time to set up. This was known to even blow limbs of Vampires.

You are contradicting yourself! Later on you say the guns have no ammunition, they shoot pure energy, here you say bloodstone provides better bullets, bullets are by nature solid. In correction, here is correct, Warplock pistols use a hammer to shatter the back portion of the loaded warpstone which propels the front section like a bullet. How does it shoot faster anyway? Is it some sort of revolver (for gods sake) or magazine fed (even worse). Take a look at flintlock pistols to see rate of fire and loading methods. And, Bloodstone, Warpstone is PURE solidified chaos energy, solidified magic. Explain how it is stronger. Finally, you say he carries a big and heavy gun,also therefore unwieldy ,along his back, this contradicts him being fast and agile. Does it have a pretty little Bloodstone scope to go along with it? A nice matching bipod?

HomeTown: A small village now not existing thanks to Skaven raids.

i haven't come up with much of a story but i was thinking:

Background: Lucien's father was an engineer in the empire, he taught Lucien how to make Pistols and use various ammo. Lucien was good at this because he was very clever, even though he had weird ways to show this. His father was proud, Lucien even helped his father create a new modified handgun, which was extremely strong. One day in the village a Skaven raid came. Skaven were known to pick on small villages, it was why they picked this one. The small horde swarmed the poor villagers and killed them with ease, only taking few prisoners one of which was Lucien, his father was killed. Lucien was hold as a slave and even fought against other clans with this clan, he had no choice. When one day the choice came for him to get out of there, ofcourse he took it and ran. On his way running he strangled a Skaven slavemaster to death and took its whip. He ran after that. As he got out into the open air he ran to where his village once was it hadn't been moved because it was in middle of mountains where noone goes. He cried over his father. He weeped for days before hunger settled in. This wasn't normal hunger, it was hunger for revenge. He got his dads two pistols and his modified handgun and went back to the Skaven. When there he hunted down the Skaven Warlock engineer that killed and slaughtered lots of people. He killed the Warlock and found his pouches, full of warpstone. He realised what he could do with this form of energy. He went deeper into the Skaven lair searching for more Warpstone. As Deimos was running he found it, the bane of all power. He called it Blood-Stone, With this he ran before the Skaven could regroup and kill him. Once outside in the open air, his tests beginned.

What tests

Skills:
Warp-Eye: He has charged his eye with magic energy, this enables him to spot enemies and aim easier with his gun. This skill grants better aim and longer vision.

You know, generally people that ingest or otherwise absorb warpstone don't live so long.

Deimos: A Rapid shooting bloodstone pistol, very strong and fast at shooting.

Strong maybe, prove to me that it can shoot rapidly!

Warplock pistol: a weekened and slower version of Deimos can kill Humans with ease but it is only a distraction against vampires, by slowing them down mainly for Deimos to shoot.

Warpstone modified handgun: Very strong gun but takes a long time to set up on the floor, also has very long range.

Last resort: As soon as a vampire gets up close to him he is as close as dead. The only thing which could save him then would be Deimos or his fast running, He almost runs as fast as a Vampire! But when he runs he often shoots his normal Warp pistol to slow them down.

And, why does he move so fast?

Warp guns: Warp guns dont require ammo as they shoot raw energy.

Incorrect, Wrong.


CONS: he is very weak and he is as tough as a human. He isn't as fast as a vampire but faster then a human. Mad.

Pros: Fast for a human. Great aim. Warp guns. Very clever.

And why does he want to help Nagash or the council? Not in search of warpstone.............. There are better ways to do that.

 

[TMS]

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Perhaps Lucien could also have some additional vampiric trait, such as a high sensitivity to sunlight? Warpstone exposure could probably turn you into pretty much anything after enough time has passed, heheh.

Also, the rapid firing of Deimos could be explained that it's simply a custom-built imperial repeater pistol, explained to have a high rate of fire in the Empire army book. Bloodstone could perhaps be what Lucien calls his own type of modified warpstone, optimized to provide stronger projectiles (clad in steel or something) without being necessarily more powerful than the regular stuff? The larger gun could easily be portrayed as a Hochland long rifle, with the warpstone ammunition accounting for the increased power. While his agility is impaired when the gun is in use, simply dropping it/stashing it away will let him regain his quickness.

Heaping fault upon fault can be a bit discouraging to read Arion. Some people, like myself, aren't very knowledgeable when it comes to the Warhammer background and to then have ones ideas pricked for every little inconsistency without providing any constructive help or advice can be, again, a bit discouraging.

Now I know that Lucien did ask to be given "the truth" about his ideas and you've done just that, or atleast your version of the truth. Perhaps I'm just taking this the wrong way and if I am, then I'm sorry.

 

[Disciple of Nagash]

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Arion,I have to agree with MS. Whilst it is excellent that you take the time to read and point out flaws, you perhaps don't release you do so in a very harsh tone. It can come across you are belittling, perhaps as well as pointing out the flaws you can help offer suggestions to rectify said mistakes.

Lucien, whilst it seems he may not have the indepth background knowledge we do, has also shown he is willing to listen, and after a first bio has taken the time to completely re-write a new one.

Ok Lucien. First of all, a much better and unique character, one you should stick with. I have highlighted my below comments in red which should fix any errors.

just read graveclaws bio and to be honest mine sounds like its trying to rip it of, but making abad job. I dont mind if urs is better aslong as i get the truth. I have sent new ideas for proof read and if they are allright i will post it for everyone to see so dont worry.
Some of thous ideas.

GRAMMAR AND SPELLING! (This is true though could have been said better Try to use the same level of spelling and grammar for all posts, as I notice below it is ok.)

Full name: Lucien the Mad

Appearence: Long grey hair to shoulders. Glowing green eyes from the warpstone he tested on them. Far out, errm whats the word, Protruding? cheek bones? Very pale. Considers himself half vampire.

I would suggest that considering himself a vampire is not needed. He is a unique and interesting character - he doesn't have to be a vampire to help the Council. Unless you mean he is a bit insane and thus has delusions?

Age: doesnt know. He lost count when he was slave for the Skaven. The warpstone has made him age alot slower then normal humans. Atleast over 100 years.

Weapons, clothes and equipment: Tanned red leather trousers with a ruined cloth top. He has a sheath to a long fin sword with runes on, named after one of the two moons, Mannslieb which was powered by Warpstone making it poisonous and magic. He has pouches around his belt full of warpstone. Also has two warpstone pistols, one of which is a repeater warpstone pistol that he calls Deimos, meening Terror in Greek. This one is faster and stronger then his other pistol. It also uses his special warpstone that he calls blood stone because it is red and provides stronger Bullets then normal warpstone. Along his back was an extremely big and heavy modifed warp handgun. (like an early days sniper rifle :thumb but this takes along time to set up. This was known to even blow limbs of Vampires.

You are contradicting yourself! Later on you say the guns have no ammunition, they shoot pure energy, here you say bloodstone provides better bullets, bullets are by nature solid. In correction, here is correct, Warplock pistols use a hammer to shatter the back portion of the loaded warpstone which propels the front section like a bullet. How does it shoot faster anyway? Is it some sort of revolver (for gods sake) or magazine fed (even worse). Take a look at flintlock pistols to see rate of fire and loading methods. And, Bloodstone, Warpstone is PURE solidified chaos energy, solidified magic. Explain how it is stronger. Finally, you say he carries a big and heavy gun,also therefore unwieldy ,along his back, this contradicts him being fast and agile. Does it have a pretty little Bloodstone scope to go along with it? A nice matching bipod?

Sarcasm aside Arion does raise some points, however they are easily fixed. Stronger weapons - I would add into your fluff that after you character go hold of the warpstone he spent some time experimenting, mixing it with blackpowder and other chemicals. He eventually stumbled upon a compound that was relatively stabled, but substantially increased the reactive force ignited. This he called Bloodstone, as it would be a tool for his revenge.
To match these new weapons he began to modify and adapt some experimental weapons left half complete by his father. He had seen some of the custom imperial weapons used when he had visited the cities and had been determined to build his own. These weapons were completed with a alloy made of steel and warpstone, so they can handle the new Bloodstone compound.
Deimos would be a repeater pistol based on this, however I would say it has limited capacity before reloading. Say 4 rapid firing shots.
Your rifle is again simply a smaller version of the Hochland Long Rifle.

There, nice and simple.

HomeTown: A small village now not existing thanks to Skaven raids.

i haven't come up with much of a story but i was thinking:

Background: Lucien's father was an engineer in the empire, he taught Lucien how to make Pistols and use various ammo. Lucien was good at this because he was very clever, even though he had weird ways to show this. His father was proud, Lucien even helped his father create a new modified handgun, which was extremely strong. One day in the village a Skaven raid came. Skaven were known to pick on small villages, it was why they picked this one. The small horde swarmed the poor villagers and killed them with ease, only taking few prisoners one of which was Lucien, his father was killed. Lucien was hold as a slave and even fought against other clans with this clan, he had no choice. When one day the choice came for him to get out of there, of course he took it and ran. On his way running he strangled a Skaven slavemaster to death and took its whip. He ran after that. As he got out into the open air he ran to where his village once was it hadn't been moved because it was in middle of mountains where noone goes. He cried over his father. He weeped for days before hunger settled in. This wasn't normal hunger, it was hunger for revenge. He got his dads two pistols and his modified handgun and went back to the Skaven. When there he hunted down the Skaven Warlock engineer that killed and slaughtered lots of people. He killed the Warlock and found his pouches, full of warpstone. He realised what he could do with this form of energy. He went deeper into the Skaven lair searching for more Warpstone. As Deimos was running he found it, the bane of all power. He called it Blood-Stone, With this he ran before the Skaven could regroup and kill him. Once outside in the open air, his tests beginned.

What tests

As mentioned above, modify your fluff to show him learning and discovering how to use warpstone. Arion is right though - what tests?

Skills:
Warp-Eye: He has charged his eye with magic energy, this enables him to spot enemies and aim easier with his gun. This skill grants better aim and longer vision.

You know, generally people that ingest or otherwise absorb warpstone don't live so long.

You don't be so complicated. Just say he has been using the weapons for so long he is an excellent shot.

Deimos: A Rapid shooting bloodstone pistol, very strong and fast at shooting.

Strong maybe, prove to me that it can shoot rapidly!
As discussed above.

Warplock pistol: a weekened and slower version of Deimos can kill Humans with ease but it is only a distraction against vampires, by slowing them down mainly for Deimos to shoot.

Warpstone modified handgun: Very strong gun but takes a long time to set up on the floor, also has very long range.

Last resort: As soon as a vampire gets up close to him he is as close as dead. The only thing which could save him then would be Deimos or his fast running, He almost runs as fast as a Vampire! But when he runs he often shoots his normal Warp pistol to slow them down.

And, why does he move so fast?
I'm having to agree on this. There is no reason why he can run as fast as a vampire. However with warpstone enhanced guns blowing limbs off vampires, they shouldn't be running to fast anyway I would drop this.

Warp guns: Warp guns dont require ammo as they shoot raw energy.
Incorrect, Wrong.
Again I would drop this. Just say he has plenty of ammo now, and once he has joined the Council they won't see him go short of materials.

However I would add:

Master Engineer: Skilled with blackpowder weaponry, Lucien can enhance almost any type, from cannons to pistols. This results in enhanced strength, range and precision (due to better crafted barrels)

CONS: he is very weak and he is as tough as a human. He isn't as fast as a vampire but faster then a human. Mad.

Pros: Fast for a human. Great aim. Warp guns. Very clever.

And why does he want to help Nagash or the council? Not in search of warpstone.............. There are better ways to do that.

Yes, this needs to be confirmed as well.

 

[Arion]

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I sincerely apologise if I came over a bit strongly Lucien. (Japanese bow)

Now with Bloodstone, could it be warpstone some acidic or poisonous substance, giving it the red sheen, and a nasty present if you do manage to remove the bullet and survive while doing said task. This would be quite plausible, explaining the colour and added effect.

Also, put Iron sights on the gun, they are realistic and better than simply aiming down the barrel.

And, reasons for joining the council: Say the engineer had a twin, enforcer, master, whatever, someone intimately connected. Your character, having heard that this skaven still lives, decides to hunt him/her down. Yet there's a catch, the Skaven has gone turncoat and begun serving Nagash because of a promise of power over the remaining Skaven after Nagash's great conquest. Blinded by ambition this skaven is unaware that Nagash abhors all life...

The Skaven, in return for power, the furfillment of his/her dreams, is opening secret tunnels, stealing caches of warpstone etc. Worth Nagah's time to keep alive for an informed and wise battle plan against the Skaven. Unlike most this Skaven is highly placed and so can supply valuable information, stores and artefacts. He/she is also perhaps the only Skaven that highly placed to be brave enough to defy the Council of Thirteen so completely, if only in secret. Very worth Nagash's time to keep alive.

Back to you Lucien, Your vamp has heard of the council, and their plans to fight Nagash, deciding this is the best way to his ultimate revenge, he takes the chance, and sets off to join the council, whether this was in a moment of lucidity or not is entirely another question...

 

[Lucien the immortal]

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modified version, i have taken into account what you have all said.


Full name: Lucien the Mad

Appearence: Long grey hair to shoulders. Glowing green eyes from the warpstone he tested on them. Far out, err what’s the word, Protruding? Cheekbones? Very pale.

Age: doesn’t know. He lost count when he was slave for the Skaven. The warpstone has made him age a lot slower then normal humans. At least over 100 years old.

Weapons, clothes and equipment: Tanned red leather trousers with a ruined cloth top. He has a sheath to a long fin sword with runes on, named after one of the two moons, Mannslieb which was powered by Warpstone making it poisonous and magic. He has pouches around his belt full of warpstone. Also has two warpstone pistols, one of which is a repeater warpstone pistol that he calls Deimos, meening Terror in Greek. This one is faster and stronger then his other pistol. Along his back was an extremely big and heavy modified handgun. (Like an early days sniper rifle but this takes along time to set up). This was known to even blow limbs of Vampires.

Sarcasm aside Arion does raise some points, however they are easily fixed. Stronger weapons - I would add into your fluff that after you character go hold of the warpstone he spent some time experimenting, mixing it with blackpowder and other chemicals. He eventually stumbled upon a compound that was relatively stabled, but substantially increased the reactive force ignited. This he called Bloodstone, as it would be a tool for his revenge.
To match these new weapons he began to modify and adapt some experimental weapons left half complete by his father. He had seen some of the custom imperial weapons used when he had visited the cities and had been determined to build his own. These weapons were completed with a alloy made of steel and warpstone, so they can handle the new Bloodstone compound.
Deimos would be a repeater pistol based on this, however I would say it has limited capacity before reloading. Say 4 rapid firing shots.
Your rifle is again simply a smaller version of the Hochland Long Rifle.

There, nice and simple.

HomeTown: A small village now not existing thanks to Skaven raids.

i haven't come up with much of a story but i was thinking:

Background: Lucien's father was an engineer in the empire, he taught Lucien how to make Pistols and use various ammo. Lucien was good at this because he was very clever, even though he had weird ways to show this. His father was proud, Lucien even helped his father create a new modified handgun, which was extremely strong. One day in the village a Skaven raid came. Skaven were known to pick on small villages, it was why they picked this one. The small horde swarmed the poor villagers and killed them with ease, only taking few prisoners one of which was Lucien, his father was killed. Lucien was hold as a slave and even fought against other clans with this clan, he had no choice. When one day the choice came for him to get out of there, of course he took it and ran. On his way running he strangled a Skaven slavemaster to death and took its whip. He ran after that. As he got out into the open air he ran to where his village once was it hadn't been moved because it was in middle of mountains where noone goes. He cried over his father. He weeped for days before hunger settled in. This wasn't normal hunger, it was hunger for revenge. He got his dads two pistols and his modified handgun and went back to the Skaven. When there he hunted down the Skaven Warlock engineer that killed and slaughtered lots of people. He killed the Warlock and found his pouches, full of warpstone. He realised what he could do with this form of energy. He went deeper into the Skaven lair searching for more Warpstone. Lucien had found an awful lot of Warpstone enough to send even the Skaven crazy. This amount of Warpstone about him was like a beacon; it bought the Skaven to him. First it was normal clanrats that were easy to kill, then came a new enemy, a Warlock Engineer. Lucien battled with this engineer for a long time; they were evenly matched with lightning against black powder, warp against steel. In the end Lucien had to run he was running out of bullets and the match was to close. The Warlock didn’t run after him, it knew he would be back to try again with better weapons. Then the Warlock would take the weapons. As Lucien toured around Empire he found a job in a small village as a blacksmith. He was annoyed about his loss but had found some things of value in the caves. First was a plan he found in the Engineers lair and second he found all the warpstone. For years Lucien tested with Warpstone and steel to make a suitable compound that was stable enough to be used as a bullet. When he did find it, it was devastating. It was a mix of steel and warpstone, he called this Blood-Stone because of the poisonous glow radiating around it. He modified his three guns even more so they could hold Blood-Stone bullets. Lucien had designed these bullets so on contact with the target if they did not die from the shot the energy from the Warpstone would mutate them in horrible ways, from the inside. He had made three different guns his two wheel lock blood stone pistols; these were strong and had an ammo capacity of four bloodstone bullets. On the other hand was the complete opposite, a massive modified Hochland rifle. It had a longer range and the new bullets made it a lot stronger. With these new weapons he searched the caves for the Warlock engineer he battled, but it wasn’t there. He searched for days on end leaving his blacksmith behind. He stumbled into the forest, the slow decay of warpstone on his body making him go crazy and malformed. As he was camping in the night and eating wild boar he remembered the plan in his pocket, he read it. It was a map to a castle. It said on it, “Plan Nagashi warpium.” Of course every person in Empire had heard of Nagash, they must have been helping him! Lucien then went in search of Nagashs’ not a clue where he was going and he needed help, desperately.


Skills:
Practice: Lucien has been using guns for so long he is a very good shot and knows vital places to hit the target. With his pistols he can run away but still aim pretty well.

Blood stone wheel lock pistol: A strong gun that shoots quite fast, it used a wheel lock and had a bullet capacity of four. It has medium range.

Blood stone Hochland rifle: Very strong gun but takes a long time to set up on the floor, also has very long range.

Master Engineer: Skilled with black powder weaponry, Lucien can enhance almost any type, from cannons to pistols. This results in enhanced strength, range and precision (due to better crafted barrels)

Bloodstone bullets: his guns use these bullets, on contact if they shatter against armour they will emit chaos radiation around the target with the armour on, this is the same for skin. This also makes the guns stronger.

CONS: he is very weak and he is as tough as a human. He is Mad.

Pros: Great aim. Warp guns. Very clever.

 

[Sweeney Todd]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

Should be OK now. Just so happens that TVC doesn't have a specialist shooter(and I don't mean magic) so your character fills that hole nicely. Plus you're only the second character who came about cause of warpstone mutation.

Although if you ask me though, I think it's fine if Lucien has enhanced rather than reduced strength. Reasonable enough given the whole package and that mutation can have benefits...

 

[Lucien the immortal]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

naah hes still as strong as a human and in combat he can use his pistols to some extent so i suppose using his pistols he is very strong anyway. If he is a gun expert i can't imagine him to be strong, even mutated.

 

[Trevy the Great]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

So in terms of this RP it's reduced, seeing as his compatriots are massive, century year-old vampires.
That's offset by the fact that he could probably shoot any one of us before we got to use that strength, of course.

 

[Lucien the immortal]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

lol but remember vampies are very fast but then again he could just shoot you in the leg o.0

 

[Azahul]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

Or I could skitterleap Rask could have quite a bit of fun when he gets to meet this guy...

 

[Lucien the immortal]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

lol but one prob, he wont like him lol I dont think Lucien the mad is a big fan of Skaven -.- Hehehe what kinda skaven is Rask?

 

[Azahul]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

A vampire skaven and not liking him isn't much of a problem. At one point Rask attacked Vekarin's citadel using Lesa as a puppet... he's not exactly popular.

 

[Get of W'soran]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

A vampire skaven and not liking him isn't much of a problem. At one point Rask attacked Vekarin's citadel using Lesa as a puppet... he's not exactly popular.

Except as a test subject perhaps

 

[Mr Nightwere]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

lol but remember vampies are very fast but then again he could just shoot you in the leg o.0

I don't think you'll be seeing me if i come after you. ill just swoop down on ya wings are use full in that type of situation. :mrgreen:

 

[Lucien the immortal]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

lol blow your wings of? :S
Anyway he might not be accepted yet...

 

[Disciple of Nagash]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

Well luckily you would be part of the Vampire Council, so it wouldn't just be Lucien and his guns vs hordes of vampires.

I am happy with the changes. A gun toting madmen hellbent on revenge sounds fun.

I've noticed not too many comments on GoW's characters? In that case the new Lucien, Menhutep and Amenakht are fine to go through.

 

[Lucien the immortal]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

thanks who will be introducing me?

 

[Disciple of Nagash]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

You will. Go across to the OOC thread and we will all discuss there how to best get your character involved.

 

[Count Gustavus]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

Ok, I'm new to the forum and to the VC WFB army, but I find the Vampire Council a really intriguing RP, and thought I would try to contribute. I'm not sure how this character would fit into the story yet, but tell me what you think of the bio.

Name: Sir Gustav Kruger
Associated Name: Blue Blood,The Knight of Frost, Knight of Blood Keep
Age:690
Bloodline: Blood Dragon
Sire: Walach Harkon
Birthplace: Middenheim

Description:
Kruger has the physical appearance of a man past his middle years, as he was turned at the age of 53. He has gray hair that hangs down past his shoulders, and a thick gray mustache that droops down on either side of his mouth. He is well built for an older man, as he stayed on a martial training schedule until his death and well beyond to this very day. He stands about 6'5" and has piercing light blue eyes. When attired for battle, he wears his frost blue full plate armor with silver inlaid runes and designs that resemble snowflakes and dragons. He carries a lance with a pennant depicting a blue dragon on a field of white and a massive zweihander strapped to his back. He rides a tall, coal-black Nightmare with barding that matches his armor. He also wears a white wolf cloak he won after besting an Inner Circle Preceptor of the White Wolf.

Equipment:
Full Plate armor as described above, resistant to flaming attacks.
His sword and lance both bear minor enchantments that numb and slow any opponent they touch. His Nightmare Strom, who is described above.

Brief History:
Gustav Kruger (distant relative of Grandmaster of the White Wolf Jerek Kruger who would later "slay" Vlad Von Carstein in the first Vampire War) was sent as a boy to train as a squire at the renowned Blood Keep where his father, a prominent noble in Middenheim hoped he would learn to be a mighty and honorable champion of good. From then on he spent the rest of his living existence serving the Order of the Knights of Blood Keep, eventually rising to the rank of Castellan. On the infamous night when Walach Harkon arrived at Blood Keep, Gustav was one of the oldest knights still serving active combat duty, and was a well-respected tactician and swordsman. After being bested in combat by Harkon, Gustav submitted to the mighty vampire and accepted the dark gift. He served his order faithfully into his unlife until Konrad von Carstein called upon his order to fight in the Vampire Wars. Seeing Konrad as nothing but the blood mad lunatic that he was, Gustav left the device of his order to travel on a personal quest to emulate the great warrior Abhorash that Master Harkon had spoken of often. He recolored his armor to symbolize his break from the order, though he kept the symbol of the dragon to represent his quest. He has since traveled from Bretonnia and Albion in the west to Cathay and Nippon in the east seeking a worthy opponent and refining his skills as a warrior. His equipment is now enchanted with protective spells that he hopes will aid him in his eventual duel with a great fire-breathing wyrm.

Pros-
Kruger is a warrior unmatched by any mortal and is second only to elder blood dragons in arts martial.
Kruger is a note-worthy tactician, as he has studied the art of war for over a half millennium.
Kruger always keeps a cool head, even in the chaos of armed combat.
Due his time spent traveling and his natural inclination for linguistics, Kruger is fluent in nearly all the languages of the Old World and Ulthuan, and even a few from the New.

Cons-
Honorable- Kruger holds to the strict code of honor that guided his life as a knight and this often causes him to be taken advantage of in combat.
No magical ability- Kruger has simply never put effort into learning the magical arts and thus cannot even perform simple cantrips that other vampires find a natural as breathing once was.
Kruger is a loner. Hundreds of years traveling alone through the uncharted wilds of the world had made him introverted to the extreme. He speaks little, and prefers his own company. He is also completely self-reliant, and will often even spurn others when help is offered.

 

[Arion]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

I must say, I like that character. Well presented and thought out.
But, reasons for joining the council... I'll have to think on it.

 

[Count Gustavus]

RE: TVC - Sign-Up Thread

Haha, yeah I sort of thought up the concept without entirely considering his place in the story. My bad I guess.