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OOPS my bad. I thought it was average for a human! (:slapface: silly me!)
I would like to point out that he is not...:happy:.... most of the time. So he spends most of his time in a normal state, and just flips out from time to time.
 
Is it me, or is Harland's character the fantasy version of the Hulk?
I'd say his stats when sane are a little high for an average human but his insane stats would depend on what happens when he goes mad. If he becomes agressive, his muscles bulge to ridiculous levels, his brain goes primal, his awareness is heightened. These and more need to be explained at least a little to understand why he goes from tactical knowledge 6 to 0 or weapon skill 5 to 8 etc.
Just some food for thought, I like that he's human rather than another vampire and when the others think he's easy meat I'm sure he'll conveniently go psycho and prove why he's useful.
 
I like parts of it, but a little more detail would be nice, personally, I think the most important descriptions are the justifications for the statistics so people understand why your character has X statistic at Y value because of Z reason.

For your character, I strongly suggest you explain the effects of him going loopy besides the signs of it, I can't see going crazy boosting weapon skill much but I can see aspects such as agility being heightened because he falls back on his primal instincts hence seeing, hearing and even smelling dangers approaching. Another example is that he loses feeling of pain so his toughness gets a little boost.

I think your character has potential to be interesting with the contrast between the 'average Joe' and the 'Hulk'. The physical and mental changes make him unpredictable and I like that he could go mental over anything, not just when it's convenient to him (hence why the hulk would be easy to kill, just snipe him while he's in a good mood).

I'll just make sure to stand at least 100 yards away from him while talking to him, just to be safe xD
 
I like the descriptions of the stats, short and sweet. I agree with the speed and agility since he's not wearing armour so he'd be alot more maneuverable Spelling?
But WS 5 rocketing to 8? He's only human, and young as well, so I'd say WS 4 at most for basic stat and then 6 when loopy, but I dunno, if you can justify it, go for it.
Technique strength - same, just maybe decrease it a little and it's fine in my view.

I love that he can make his own food or be an effective forager, that way we don't have to worry about him forcing us to stop at every maccy d's on the way to our destinations xD

One small thing that makes me :mad2: is the strengths/weaknesses bit. I know it can be annoying repeating what you've pretty much already said, but simple overviews of the good and bad makes it easy to understand his use and how to roleplay with him in 1 or 2 seconds.

Example:
His sanity and his insanity combined make him unpredictable, hence he can be difficult to read in a fight. However, this insanity also means that he is hard to place faith in simply because you never know when he'll change making him difficult to accomodate in battle plans.
The flaw of his insanity is like Dr Jekyll as he is more useful when in 'hyde' mode to win a fight, but less useful to plan tactics with and for hiding amongst humans. :perv:

As long as you provide a small list of his pros and cons (besides just disliking cabbage) then I'd say he's good to go. ;)
 
Right I'm back and ready for business. Real Life is boring. I went to rend and tear ome mortals :suck: I will read the chapters tonight and get some posting done.
 
Sounds like how today would have went for me if Leeds didn't get promoted.

Just wondering how Viktor and co should meet the others. It would seem a bit rude to walk in on everyone bowing to Vlad, I've sort of left my post open for someone to say what's going/where to go so my guy doesn't end up decapitated for rudely bumping in on Vlad's re-birthday.
 
Welcome back LoR!

@Harland: Like what OoTBR has said, the stats for your dude are waaay too high for a normal human. Keep in mind that 5 is the 'average' number in most stats for a normal vampire lord of the Carstein bloodline. A normal human should start off much lower, like at 2. Do read the opening post of the new signup thread for the guidelines.

Also, your character needs more substantial background. I can't see any reason for him to be involved in the story as it is now.

@Xaret: I'd tone down the WS and Agility by one pip each. Other than that, looks good.
 
Order of the blood dragon aka Order.
I believe its always necessary, to have a big entrance, or an interesting one at the least. Make your arrival out of the ordinary. After all your character will only join the council once xD.
Never twice....:grave: hehe
 
Well... technically I do get to join twice, I joined earlier when the council was heading to blood keep, then joined again now, I understand what you mean though, I think it will be dramatic enough simply because Viktor thinks the council is at drakenhof but the von carsteins dislike the council right now.
 
With a start Viktor recognised them as the same breed of creature who had attacked the council and himself. The Baalak Gul took up position blocking the only way out.

Hey Simon. Care to enlighten me on these types, so I know what I am looking at? Thanks.
 
I thought about it but I don't have any idea what is going on (don't read those chapters much) and I don't know the characters at all so it would be very difficult to just step in and fill the gaps.
 
Yeah ok then.. if you could PM the relevant info or something then I'll look at it tomorrow and hopefully get something posted up.
 

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